Painted Ladies
Between,
in the interval
that separates
two,
like bubbles 'twixt
your bathing feet,
subtly parted
by the drip
your bathing feet,
subtly parted
by the drip
from the faucet
I need to fix.
What drip is it
that keeps us
apart,
I need to fix.
What drip is it
that keeps us
apart,
we two who know
each other so well?
Your toes
above the suds,
ruby nails
like painted ladies,
Your toes
above the suds,
ruby nails
like painted ladies,
catch my eye,
inviting me
to explore
the interval
that lies
between.
inviting me
to explore
the interval
that lies
between.
25 comments:
The poem's creative, evocative.
Wow, this is an amazing poem, you have made the idea of a bubble bath completely thought provoking! Wonderful writing! :-)
provocative! And well done.
I like the introspective thoughts in this piece - they go well below the surface water...
Wonderfully romantic in a lovely, familiar, conversational way. I adore the evocative notion of the toes as painted ladies. Wow, Linthead, you're good.
very inventive tale.
Quite the painted ladies you have described ~ and so well!
I love the toes described as painted ladies. Really good.
Lusciously romantic and very mesmerising. The imagery is vivid.
Let's just call it like it is, Dr. M, that was HOT!
Wheeee, DanaBug's a lucky woman.
Dear C.L.,
I'm with KimQuiltz on this one. Steamin'!
Ann T.
I agree Kim & Ann - I was blushing a bit when I read it :)
painted ladies! Love it!
Love it!! I have to laugh at some of the male stereotypes you've supported. A woman sees a relaxing moment... a man sees a leaky faucet he needs to fix!
The last line is tantalizing!
Beautiful and romantic. As Willow said, I like the conversational tone to it.
Very well written and thought provoking.
'we two who know
each other so well?' Reheating an old romance, and so you should. But don't put it off to fix the drip or it won't be the only drip in the room!
Precisely, Stafford Ray! I definitely had the double meaning of "drip" in mind. Thanks to all y'all. Baths can be steamy affairs, what can I say?
Wow that was sensual.
Ah, sweet!
ooo...explore away and perhaps the distnaces will not be so great. smiles. nice mag!
my magpie
creative, provocative.. romantic..
u got it all in this piece! :)
Leo
love the line " what drip keeps us apart" nice...bkm
I like this ... and the intervals that lie between...
love the voice and flow of this piece, really well done. it's kinda sexy too.
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