Thursday, August 19, 2010

Magpie Tales

Painted Ladies


Between,
in the interval
that separates
two,
like bubbles 'twixt
your bathing feet,
subtly parted
by the drip
from the faucet
I need to fix.

What drip is it
that keeps us
apart,
we two who know
each other so well?

Your toes
above the suds,
ruby nails
like painted ladies,
catch my eye,
inviting me
to explore
the interval
that lies
between.


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25 comments:

Jim Swindle said...

The poem's creative, evocative.

Carrie Burtt said...

Wow, this is an amazing poem, you have made the idea of a bubble bath completely thought provoking! Wonderful writing! :-)

altar ego said...

provocative! And well done.

jinksy said...

I like the introspective thoughts in this piece - they go well below the surface water...

willow said...

Wonderfully romantic in a lovely, familiar, conversational way. I adore the evocative notion of the toes as painted ladies. Wow, Linthead, you're good.

Jingle said...

very inventive tale.

Helen said...

Quite the painted ladies you have described ~ and so well!

Martin H. said...

I love the toes described as painted ladies. Really good.

Sam Liu said...

Lusciously romantic and very mesmerising. The imagery is vivid.

KimQuiltz said...

Let's just call it like it is, Dr. M, that was HOT!

Wheeee, DanaBug's a lucky woman.

Ann T. said...

Dear C.L.,
I'm with KimQuiltz on this one. Steamin'!

Ann T.

The Bug said...

I agree Kim & Ann - I was blushing a bit when I read it :)

kathew said...

painted ladies! Love it!

violet said...

Love it!! I have to laugh at some of the male stereotypes you've supported. A woman sees a relaxing moment... a man sees a leaky faucet he needs to fix!

The last line is tantalizing!

Jennifer said...

Beautiful and romantic. As Willow said, I like the conversational tone to it.

Marilyn said...

Very well written and thought provoking.

Stafford Ray said...

'we two who know
each other so well?' Reheating an old romance, and so you should. But don't put it off to fix the drip or it won't be the only drip in the room!

Carolina Linthead said...

Precisely, Stafford Ray! I definitely had the double meaning of "drip" in mind. Thanks to all y'all. Baths can be steamy affairs, what can I say?

Kristen Haskell said...

Wow that was sensual.

Tumblewords: said...

Ah, sweet!

Brian Miller said...

ooo...explore away and perhaps the distnaces will not be so great. smiles. nice mag!

my magpie

Leo said...

creative, provocative.. romantic..

u got it all in this piece! :)

Leo

signed...bkm said...

love the line " what drip keeps us apart" nice...bkm

Vicki Lane said...

I like this ... and the intervals that lie between...

Patience said...

love the voice and flow of this piece, really well done. it's kinda sexy too.